the places I hid
when I was a child
I’ll forgo confession, and just say I relate to this one. For a few years now, I’ve been returning to a haiku that incorporates lichen, but like lichen, needs the right conditions, and hasn’t grown into itself. Yours has, I think.
Thanks so much, Mark. I tried a lot of things with lichen before I got to this … and I think for me it still isn’t quite there … Lichen is elusive.
Perfect, that’s so good, Mel. And that first line, such a great set-up, as it seems about to go someplace unlovely, but then it is turned somewhere else completely
Someplace unlovely? You have something against lichen, Ash?
… Thanks, glad you liked it!
Haha! Yeah, I think I must!
So interesting…I love lichen, I think it’s beautiful. So that’s a totally different perspective on the poem if you think lichen is unattractive…
Yeah – and for me it remains so effective either way, a great ku to be able to do that
Just fantastic, Melissa. The haiku as a whole, and the almost anagram-like closeness of lichen, hid, child. Wonderful! M
Oh, thanks, Mark! So glad you liked it. I never even noticed the way those words play off each other. But now I’m really impressed with myself.
that is beautiful!
I really like this. Lovely and touching. I usually do not share a similiar haiku in my comments but I’m trying to branch out. I posted this on March 19:
the lichen too
breathe in the light
That’s lovely. I keep trying to write more lichen poetry but I find it quite difficult.
I wonder if your first line was something more like “full moon” or “waxing moon” — would that give more of a sense of the moon breathing and thus connect it more strongly to the last two lines? It’s such a striking juxtaposition.
Thank you. Luminous was chosen because it was the night of the “giant” full moon. It may have been last month when the moon appeared closer and larger than usual. The discussion of a single word and its varied nuances is very engaging. I appreciate your feedback and will reconsider the first line. I enjoy your blog/poems allot.
That was quite an amazing moon, I hear…sadly it was cloudy here, so we missed it.
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