May 3: 5 (Seven or Eight)

seven or eight
sparrows
count them again

4 thoughts on “May 3: 5 (Seven or Eight)”

Eelco Bruinsma says:

A haiku with a grand concept, in fact, it’s a meta-haiku 😀 It starts as a very precise observation of visual reality and then suddenly stops in doubt. This switching of levels is very nice.

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May 4, 2010 at 2:54 am
- MLA says:
  
  Thanks so much for this thoughtful comment, Eelco. I now know more about this haiku than I did when I wrote it. 🙂
  
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  May 4, 2010 at 9:30 am
Christopher Leibow says:

i like the attention in the poem. lovely

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May 4, 2010 at 9:55 am
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