(See this post for an explanation of what’s going on here.)
“… Some say one should be able to read the first line and the third line to find it makes a complete thought. Sometimes one does not know in which order to place the images in a haiku. When the images in the first and third lines have the strongest relationship, the haiku usually feels ‘complete.’ For exercise, take any haiku and switch the lines around to see how this factor works, or try reading the haiku without the second line.
holding the day
between my hands
a clay pot”
– Jane Reichhold, Haiku Techniques
This was way harder than it looked. And it looked hard.
I think part of the problem was that I really loved Jane’s example and none of my efforts came anywhere near her standard. I even resorted to breaking down her ku into parts of speech hoping that would provide some sort of formula for success:
gerund, noun object
But now I am a little bit obsessed with making one of these work, somehow, sometime. Anyone else got anything?
one leftover cloud
watching your eyes
the summer stars
a tree full
squirrels making lists
our dark words
4 thoughts on “July 30: 1-4: The Technique of Above as Below”
I guess this blog would go into my study material…I definitely love haiku; but to research and study about it…and to try it in those lines….perhaps Iater in life…when I can freely spare time for that…Your blog is a study material, Melissa 🙂
now i will just enjoy reading and gaining things as i go,
I’m glad you’re enjoying, Devika!
i’m very taken with ‘watching your eyes … summer stars” wow! That’s so sweet.
Thanks, Elisabeth. 🙂