8 winter shadows the color of winter hats
9 spinning in circles trying to reason with the galaxy
10 cold archive room Abe Lincoln’s ordinary horse
11 chocolate sauce dipping a toe in a sun-warmed puddle
12 lark silver bullet entering my airspace
13 clouds of the world checking their immigration status
14 oil slick nebula in embryo
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I seem to be doing very weird things with these. I guess that’s kind of the point of this endeavor. Well, I kind of see it as the point. Experimenting, risking seeming stupid or incompetent in hopes that you’ll occasionally hit upon something interesting or worthwhile. I’ve had to force myself to be very brave and non-self-censoring this month. I keep imagining people thinking to themselves, “God, she’s gone off the deep end, hasn’t she?” Wandering away shaking their heads. Wondering if they really want to come back.
It’s interesting, though, because whenever I start to feel guilty about inflicting some trite gobbledygook on you people, it will turn out that people actually like the stuff I thought was trite gobbledygook. I mean, people with good taste, better taste than I have. I’m starting to wonder if I actually have the slightest idea what I’m doing here … Stop nodding your heads so vigorously.
Halfway through. I guess I’ll make it.
Keep it going, Melissa – 9, 12, & 13 are quite intriguing.
“wonder if I actually have the slightest idea what I’m doing here” … the philosophy behind haiku, from way back.
Don
Thanks, Don. Yeah…I’m trying to keep a beginner’s mind about this whole thing.
Wait ’til you see what I have planned for President’s Day, Melissa. Then, we’ll talk!
Margaret
Oooh…can’t wait! (I have other Lincoln ku in reserve, just so you know. 🙂 )
Bring it on!
Spinning in circles strikes a good chord. I like the interplay between big nature galaxy and human reason – nature and man. Everything is connected; everything spins to its own rhythm. Or is it the same rhythm? Good haiku.
Sully
Thanks, Sully! Always good to have your feedback.
‘weird things…’, true! But true in the spirit of haiku or so I, too, feel it is. I like #9 and Sully expresses why. The image of #11 and how it skids around to mean more also appeals to me. I love #11 the most because of how you ‘jux’ it and I relate to it personally!
I keep trying to write more haiku about chocolate but haven’t been very successful so far. I’m sure one will come to me someday …