from my window
at dawn the traffic light
you are on your way and
nothing I say can stop you
von meinem Fenster
am Abend die Ampel
du bist auf dem Weg und
keins meiner Worte hält dich mehr auf
(Chrysanthemum 9, April 2011)
11 thoughts on “(from my window)”
Wow, Melissa! A perfect tanka for me. I love the simplicity of it, the sadness yet the feeling of being released. I like how you paired ‘the red light’ with the last line. Thanks for sharing it!
Thanks much, Alegria, glad you liked it!
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Thanks, Margaret! Coming from such a tanka master that’s a real compliment. 🙂
I really dig the line ‘du bist auf dem weg’ I can hear it. It somehow seems loaded with meaning all of its own.
Thanks, Steve. Yeah, German kills me. Sometimes it’s crazy and overwrought and sometimes very simple and homely and slightly heartbreaking, like here.
I dig this one, and others 😉
Thanks, Laz. 🙂
Very nice, Melissa!
Thanks, Sanjuktaa. 🙂