i like this a lot. every line is a solid image or thing that can actually exist in the way you’ve laid it out. i like and value that in ku altho i appreciate more abstract images/thinking/words in other forms. i do watch for everything being believable in ku – even tho i know it’s okay if it’s done other ways too and even like them.
I like it a lot too, and I know what you mean about the concreteness of the images. I know my ku can get really abstract … I do have a really abstract mind and I tend to get lost really easily in ideas and not notice, you know, reality so much. But I’m working on it. 🙂 I think the thing I like about this is that it does work on a literal level but it also works on a metaphorical and a philosophical level. I’d like to do more of this kind of thing but it ain’t easy. 🙂
Red Dragonfly 
i like this a lot. every line is a solid image or thing that can actually exist in the way you’ve laid it out. i like and value that in ku altho i appreciate more abstract images/thinking/words in other forms. i do watch for everything being believable in ku – even tho i know it’s okay if it’s done other ways too and even like them.
I like it a lot too, and I know what you mean about the concreteness of the images. I know my ku can get really abstract … I do have a really abstract mind and I tend to get lost really easily in ideas and not notice, you know, reality so much. But I’m working on it. 🙂 I think the thing I like about this is that it does work on a literal level but it also works on a metaphorical and a philosophical level. I’d like to do more of this kind of thing but it ain’t easy. 🙂
yeah. exactly. it works on multiple levels. that’s when ku are really rocking (imo) and all within that concrete image. wow.